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Categories Literature > Poetry > Erotic > Open


U n s a v e   m e

Steal away the softness from my eyes.
I want your fingerprints on my thighs,
The rainbows you leave there
When I taste your blood on my lips.
Cruel savior-
Make me beg.

Starve me-
Feed me the emptiness I crave,
Please- kiss me with your teeth.
Fill my head with your throat-sounds,
Primal
To chase away the void.

I cannot stand your gentle hands.
Unstained,
They stroke so tenderly,
And though I ache for you
To score with pointed fingertips
The smooth skin of my hips,
You do not.

Bruise away my bitter deeds
Like I long of you.
Tarnish me
Sweet prince,
Rid me of damned innocence,
Flay me with my longing
So hollow-
My raspy yes is barbed within my throat.

Red welts on ivory skin,
Black oceans of bliss
Your name, carved deep enough to scar.
These things I want-
For you to make me nothing,
Free me from myself,
Blind me so that I may see you,
Choke me so that I may breathe.

U n s a v e   m e.
©2006-2009 ~fragile-burn
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Author's Comments

A work in progress... I just felt like submitting something, and this is what came out.

Comments


:iconkahlia:
Mood: Speechless ~Kahlia Sep 24, 2006, 2:43:56 PM
This is some seriously striking imagery combined with hushed desires being voiced. Incredible. :love:

--
“Avoid the world, it's just a lot of dust and drag and means nothing in the end.”

-Kerouac
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Mood: Adoration ~fragile-burn Sep 24, 2006, 5:33:06 PM
Wow, thank you so much!! I'm shocked, I was actually pretty unhappy with the flow of this piece, but I'm thrilled that you like it!! :hug:
:iconkahlia:
~Kahlia Sep 24, 2006, 6:56:34 PM
Really? I thought the flow was flawless. Awesome, awesome! :) :hug:

--
“Avoid the world, it's just a lot of dust and drag and means nothing in the end.”

-Kerouac
:iconbleedingtears96:
~bleedingtears96 Sep 24, 2006, 8:27:02 PM
Hot. + <3

--
Invisible shades of nothing
My blade raises high
Invisible shades of nothing
You are going to die

---[pls view my gallery]---
:iconglamorousxtoxic:
Mood: Amazed ~GlamorousxToxic Sep 24, 2006, 8:53:18 PM
Woo, This is amazingly well done. I love it, Its hard to explain why but I really like it. =D

:+fav:
:iconundeadkitten:
~undeadkitten Sep 24, 2006, 9:21:19 PM
wow this is beautiful, so sincere & visceral, i love this, this is a fave!!!
:iconracheljacobi:
~RachelJacobi Sep 24, 2006, 9:28:47 PM
I absoluetely love this, it perfectly depicts that carnal lust you feel, the wanting to be abused..as sick as it sounds..that primal, rough instinct... wonderful work [link]
:iconanime-kisekae:
~anime-kisekae Sep 24, 2006, 10:02:42 PM
Wow, this is seriously amazing. The words flow beautifully and keep their rhythm, and the concept is wonderfully executed. Fabulous job.

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Fandom Wank: Because fandom is Serious Business

tophets_tool: [blah blah incest/slash wank] From now on, could no-one refer to any pairing as 'heterosexual'? It's very insensitive to those of us who have to live with the burden of being straight.
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~anime-kisekae Sep 24, 2006, 10:03:13 PM
Congrats on making it to the popular section, by the way. You deserve it for this.

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Fandom Wank: Because fandom is Serious Business

tophets_tool: [blah blah incest/slash wank] From now on, could no-one refer to any pairing as 'heterosexual'? It's very insensitive to those of us who have to live with the burden of being straight.
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~Dark-Childe Sep 25, 2006, 1:33:38 AM
Damn......

No other word describes this. :+fav:

--
Fatality is like ghosts in snow and you have no idea what you're up against
because I've seen what they look like.
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